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The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and makes comparisons where relevant

The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and makes comparisons where relevant
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The bar chart illustrates the proportion of house owners and renters in England and Wales from 1918 to 2011.
Overall
, At the start of
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graph
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 people tend to
rent
 houses rather than buy. Over time,
rent
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the rent
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accommodation
 rate goes down and people were buying houses for
the
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accommadation
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accommodation
. Until 1971 rented
accommodation
 was the
lead
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 of the housing after that owned passed the
rent
accommodation
 and takes the lead. In the beginning, Over 70
percentage
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 of
the
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people rents
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a house
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house
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 for living and nearly 20%
households
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of households
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has
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 their own house. In time, households tend to quit
rent
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renting
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 and started to buy houses
to
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for
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accommodation
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accommodate
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. Between 1953 and 2001 owned
accommodation
 constantly rose. The owned
accommodation
 goes up and reaches the peak point
at
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in
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 2001 which
were
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was
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 nearly 70
percentage
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 and decreased slightly in 2011.
On the other hand
, rented
accommodation
 falls until 2001 and slightly rose to nearly 40% in 2011.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rent, accommodation with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "goes down" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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