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The table shows the proportions of income spent on 4 common items in the UK in 1998.

The table shows the proportions of income spent on 4 common items in the UK in 1998.
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The table shows the proportion of income adults and children spent on 4 common items: food, electronic equipment, music and videos in the UK in 1998.
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, adults and women spent the most expenses on food
which
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apply
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represented 25 percentages and 39
percent
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per cent
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 respectively. Children spent their money equally but music cost them the most which represented 39
percentages
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per cent
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;
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additionally
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,additionally
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 boys and girls
also
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 spent a lot on music which represented 28
percentages
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per cent
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 and 40 interest respectively.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 86%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "represented" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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