The table shows the proportions of income spent on 4 common items in the UK in 1998.

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The table shows the proportion of income adults and children spent on 4 common items: food, electronic equipment, music and videos in the UK in 1998.

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, adults and women spent the most expenses on food

which

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apply

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represented 25 percentages and 39

percent

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per cent

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respectively. Children spent their money equally but music cost them the most which represented 39

percentages

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per cent

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;

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additionally

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,additionally

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boys and girls

also

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spent a lot on music which represented 28

percentages

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per cent

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and 40 interest respectively.

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

2 paragraphs

77 words

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The table shows the proportions of income spent on 4 common items in the UK in 1998.

It is arguable that some proponents believe that domestic waste is not recycled properly and they want the government to take actions in order to encourage people to recycle more.

Many employers find that their new employees lack sufficient interpersonal skills such as lack of ability to work with colleagues as a team. What are the causes? Can you suggest some possible solutions?

it is a natural process for animal species to become extinct (dinosaur,dodo), there is no reason why people should try to prevent thid form happening.

Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

An overseas friend wants to visit your country on holiday. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter •Recommend the best time of year to visit and why •Describe the types of accommodation your friend could choose – •Say what you would like to show your friend in your country