The charts below show the percentage in typical meals of three types if nutrient, all of which maybe unhealthy if eaten too much.

The charts below show the percentage in typical meals of three types if nutrient, all of which maybe unhealthy if eaten too much.
The given pie charts illustrate
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average percentage of three nutrients in 4 different meals in the USA.
Overall
,
it is clear that
dinner is the unhealthiest meal in their diet
while
breakfast is the healthiest. 43% of
American`s
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dinner
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dinners
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contains Sodium and 37% of it contains fat, these factors make dinner the most harmful meal among all four. 42% of their Snack has added sugar which is as much
all
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other nutrients combined and
thus
, Snack is the second unhealthiest meal in the US.
However
. the healthiest food that
the
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Americans consume throughout the day is breakfast which contains 10% of fat sugar and 14% of Sodium
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considering that all nutrients do not even
make up
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50% of breakfast , it is the healthiest and causes the least amount of harm compared to other 3.
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