You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: Fresh water has always been a limited resource in some parts of the world. Today, however, growing worldwide demand has made this a global problem. What are the causes of the increased demand, and what measures could governments and individuals take to respond to this problem?

The development of technology
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caused a phenomenon that
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watching smartphone nonstop for many hours per day. To be honest, I can conclude that
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no positive side at all right in the opening and it must have
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serious consideration
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from
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parents all around the world. To be more
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, I am going to explain to you why
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right
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way
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by what they hear and look
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According to
The New York Times research in 2015,
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by social media
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. These applications on
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were extremely popular these days even in current
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, about 46% of YouTube users are kids under 13 but there
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restriction
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on social media at that time. The consequence of
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videos that contained violence, pornographic,
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content are just one click in front of
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eyes. If they watch these harmful things
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in
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inappropriate age, it could lead to bad
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in the future. That was just an example of how
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fresh water scarcity
  • limited resource
  • worldwide demand
  • water conservation
  • sustainable infrastructure
  • desalination
  • water recycling
  • industrialization
  • agriculture irrigation
  • population growth
  • climate change
  • industrial regulation
  • water management
  • policy implementation
  • water-efficient appliances
  • public awareness campaigns
  • rationing of water
  • international treaties
  • conservation measures
  • groundwater depletion
  • ecosystem preservation
  • sustainability practices
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