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The bar chart shows percentage of male and female in 2007 over the UK that are chiefs in six contrasting types of career.

The bar chart shows percentage of male and female in 2007 over the UK that are chiefs in six contrasting types of career.
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The bar chart demonstrates the proportion of
men
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 and
women
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 in 2007 over the UK that are chiefs in six contrasting types of career.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the most popular for females is Teaching
whereas
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 for males is the Construction profession, both got an enormous percentage which is 90%.
To begin
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 with, the only profession
that is
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 equal for males and females - Journalism. A slight contrast took place in Advertising where females are overtaking
men
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 in quantity by 10%.
However
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, in professions
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 as Scientology and Law where
men
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 left behind
women
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 that ratio was 3:2. The lowest part which is 10% for girls and males was both in Teaching and Construction. The second place for significant contrast was in Therapists where it is over 60 per cent benefit for
women
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. In conclusion, there is a serious difference between
men
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 and
women
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 in every field except Construction, Teaching and Therapists where the contrast is astonishing.

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