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You have seen an advertisement in a newspaper for a job in the city post office during your holidays. You decide to apply for the job. Write a letter to the director of the post office. In your letter, introduce yourself explain what experience and special skills you have explain why you are interested in the job

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am a student at JNU and I am
writting
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writing
this
 letter to apply for a part-time job
for
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 the position of
a
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apply
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Post office clerk which I have seen in an advertisement in today's newspaper. I
have
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worked as a receptionist at an international hotel during my
last
 summer vacation. I have
a
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good communication skills and I am a quick learner too .
Moreover
, I have worked as a sales representative at Kia motors and I have the ability to blend with the team.
Therefore
, I will be meeting your job
requiremnets
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requirements
 for a postal clerk.
Furthermore
, it will be beneficial for my career growth as I am looking to join
this
 organization once I finish my degree. I want to be a part of postal services and serve the nation.
This
 job opportunity could provide me
a
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good knowledge and experience. Kindly, consider my profile for the
postision
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position
 of Postal Clerk. I am looking forward to a positive response from your end. Yours
failthfully
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faithfully
, Mohammad
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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