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In many countries, people throw away a lot of food from restaurants and shops. Why do you think people waste food in this way? What can be done to reduce the amount of food thrown away?

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One of the heated issues is
people
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 throw away a lot of
food
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 from restaurants and shops. There are many factors leading to
people
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 do not want to keep
leftovers
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. Here are some causes and solutions we need to do to minimize the amount of
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 thrown away. There is no doubt that restaurant staff
throws
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 away a lot of
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, the reason is to ensure
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 hygiene and safety.
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 restaurant wants customers to feel more secure about the quality of the
food
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, for they do not want employees to bring in
leftovers
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 because it will become a bad habit for their employees. The solution to
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 problem involves many factors.
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,
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 can seriously pollute the environment if the garbage is not disposed of properly. The most familiar example of
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 is in the UK
people
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 often
waste
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food
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leftovers
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, which contributes to the increased risk of environmental pollution. It seems quite clear that
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waste
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food
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 in
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 way for many reasons that have many consequences and we need to reduce it. It is
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 well known that
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 many countries around the world have used
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 to carry out campaigns against
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food
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waste
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.
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, governments should present an attractive option for fighting
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waste
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. Cost savings is
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 responsible for
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 being aware that they should buy less
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. Nothing could be more apparent than the evidence that France is considered the country with the least amount of
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waste
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 in the world thanks to many measures including public awareness. Probably, there is some truth in the idea that we need to act now to reduce the
waste
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 of
leftovers
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. In summary, we must use up the purchased
food
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 to save costs and protect the environment.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overproduction
  • inefficient
  • supply chains
  • perception
  • disposable
  • replaceable
  • awareness
  • education
  • regulations
  • redistribution
  • donation
  • portion control
  • inventory management
  • public awareness campaigns
  • attitudes
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