The bar chart below shows the percentage of share of total world production by Asia, Europe and other parts of the world from the years 1840 to 2000.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of share of total world production by Asia, Europe and other parts of the world from the years 1840 to 2000.
The bar chart illustrates the
percentage
of total
world
production
in terms of
Asia
,
Europe
, and the
rest
of the
world
, between 1840 and 2000.
Overall
, the
production
in
Europe
and
Asia
was
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decreased over
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period of time
whereas
percentage
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the percentage
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of
production
in the
rest
of the
world
increased significantly. It can be seen a significant majority of the
production
in the
rest
of the
world
between 1840 and 2000. In general ,
the
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downward trend was seen in
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the percentage
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of
production
in
Asia
in
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80 years. In 1880 the
production
in
Asia
was
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declined to around 20% by 1920.In 1960, there was
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slightly
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increase
of
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production
in
Asia
which
was
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peaked
on
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around 40%
till
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2000. By 1840, the
world
’s
production
from
Europe
was lesser as
compare
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to
Asia
. By the year 2000,
Asia
’s share of
production
had risen to 40%.
In Addition
, the
production
in the
rest
of the
world
continued to increase to around 35% in 1960 but In 2000 the
rest
of the
world
had little dropped by around 5% which was not
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difference in
world’s
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the world’s
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production
percentage
. In 2000 the respective figures for
Europe
and the
rest
of the
world
climbed significantly to approximately 39% and 34%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, world, production, asia, europe, rest with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 3 times.

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