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Write a letter to local authorities by requesting additional sports facilities for your age in your area. Mention about the current sports facilities available. What kind of additional sports facilities should be introduced? How the new sports facilities would be a help for the people in your age group.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I hope you are well. I am writing
this
 letter regarding additional sports facilities for people middle-aged in the Knowles Wharf area. Currently, we have only a football pitch available in our neighbour and
unfortunately
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 not all women are willing to do that pastime. Another facility is a swimming pool
however
 the condition is not hygienic and needs lots of repairs.
Moreover
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 I believe that a swimming pool is not for everyone. I would like to propose new facilities for people middle-aged like
for instance
 a tennis court or an outdoor gym in the Knowles Wharf area. I believe that kind of place will be more beneficial for everyone as not only the elder but the young and adulescent could use them. It is irrefutable that women and men need to do games for health reasons which will reduce laziness.
Furthermore
, sports facilities would create places where adults could meet up and spend time together. I look forward to hearing from you, M
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