The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree?

Some
people
believe that online shopping will replace actual
shops
and
it
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will lead to them closing in the end.
This
effect of online shopping which was always debatable
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has now become more controversial. It can be strongly agreed upon that
this
matter has some convincing arguments, despite the contention about it.
Firstly
, online shopping makes it easy and very convenient for the user to check what they need to buy
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a click of their mouse and from their house or in some cases from their workplace. There is no denying that
this
method provides the individual smooth access to many different
shops
at one time, rather than walking and checking each and every store personally. Online shopping
also
has a huge advantage when compared to traditional
shops
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that we can do shopping internationally.
This
unique experience of checking out clothes, jewellery or even house furniture can be checked at the website of these international brands.
Nevertheless
,
on the other
hand
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with an actual store,
people
have the privilege to check stuff
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and try
out
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on themselves.
While
shopping online,
this
issue of having the right fit for clothes or shoes is hard, since many times it is not the right fit for us.
Therefore
the customer has to go through the trouble of resending the things they purchased and have to wait days or sometimes weeks to get back the item.
Still
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this
is not a major problem when doing online shopping, because with time
people
tend to know their size when they order their stuff.
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issues
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is that
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sometimes the product that
people
order online may be delivered as factory damaged or not as brand new. Again in
this
situation
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customers have no choice but to send it back to receive a replacement.
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I agree that with time and technology, traditional
shops
will be closing down and
people
would prefer shopping online as opposed to actual stores.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • physical stores
  • online retailers
  • retail apocalypse
  • digital economy
  • consumer behavior
  • sustainability
  • commercial landscape
  • high-street
  • consumer trends
  • augmented reality
  • showrooms
  • carbon footprint
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