The table below shows information and predictions regarding the change in percentage of the poplulation age 65 and above in three countries.

The table below shows information and predictions regarding the change in percentage of the poplulation age 65 and above in three countries.
The table illustrates the information and predictions
according to
the change that might occur to the
population
age
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65 and above in three countries. The data shown is the
percentage
of the
population
in Canada, Germany and the UK. At first glance, it can clearly be seen that the most predictable change is in Germany during 2030,
while
the least one is in the UK in 1988. First of all, in
Canada
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the
percentage
started at 16%
during
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1988 and kept increasing until reaching 21% in 2000. The predictable change in the
percentage
landed
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26% in 2030.
On the other hand
, Germany reached 20% by 1988 and slightly jumped to 25% in 2000. Eventually, the
percentage
ended at 30%.
According to
the UK, the predictable
percentage
of the
population
in 1988 and 2000 were similar
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reaching 14% and 15%, respectively. After that, the number went up significantly and hit 20% in 2030 which was higher than the
population
in 2000 by exactly 5%.
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