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The graph below shows the proportion of four different materials that were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The graph below shows the proportion of four different materials that were recycled from 1982 to 2010 in a particular country. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The
graph
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 below illustrates the statistics( in percentages) of recycled
paper
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 and
cardboard
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.
Glass
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 containers, aluminium cans, and plastic.
Overall
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, it is obvious from the
graph
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 that the most recycled materials from 1982 to 2010 were
paper
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/
cardboard
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 and
glass
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 containers.
On the other hand
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, the least recycled material was plastic. Looking closer at the
graph
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 reveals that
paper
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/
cardboard
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 and
glass
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 containers were the most recycled materials in 1980 with the highest
rates
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 well over 65% and just over 50%.
However
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, the
rates
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 of recycling both experienced fluctuations over the given years.
Paper
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 recycling increased from 1982 and reached 70% in 1986.
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, it fell back dramatically to well under 70% in 1990 and jumped again to 80% in 1996.From around 1996 to 2010 ,
paper
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 and
cardboard
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 recycling
rates
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 declined again and slowly fell back to 70% in 2010.
Rates
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 of recycling
glass
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 ,
on the other hand
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, experienced a significant decrease between 1992 and 1990, falling by 10% followed by a jump to 50% in 1995 after which it increased gradually over the following years reaching over 60% by 22010. Another important trend shown in the
graph
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 is the increase in
rates
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 of recycling aluminium recycling which
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 the
graph
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 only started in 1986 and from 1986 to 2010 it experienced a sharp rise, peaking in 2010 and reaching nearly 45%.
Rates
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 of recycling plastic
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,
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 remained the same from the year people started recycling it in 1990 and 2010, only increasing by 10 % over the years.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, on the other hand".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words graph, paper, cardboard, glass, rates with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "jumped" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • recycled
  • materials
  • increased
  • paper and cardboard
  • plastic
  • glass
  • metal
  • significant increase
  • relatively stable
  • fluctuating
  • period
  • starting
  • reaching
  • gradually increasing
  • remained low
  • experienced
  • showed
  • greatest
  • proportion
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