The diagrams below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The diagrams below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided diagrams illustrate the public
park
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named Grange
park
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as it was in 1920 and its present view.
Overall
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, many elements in 1920 have
replaced
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in
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the current view.
Besides
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, new elements have
introduced
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to facilitate users. The
water
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fountain which was in the centre of the
park
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replaced with a rose
garden
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and 4 seating areas.
However
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, the bottom left rose
garden
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have
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demolished in the current plan.
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,
upper-right
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an upper-right
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rose
garden
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which was situated near the entrance
in
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to
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Arnold Avenue
have
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replaced with
the
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a
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cafe to provide coffee or snacks. The current plan consists of
and
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an
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outdoor theatre which used to be
stage
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the stage
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for musicians back in 1920. Another significant change is the new
water
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feature in
bottom
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the bottom
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right corner, which was the replacement of the glass house. In 1920 there was a pond for
water
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plants and it has transformed into a play area.
In addition
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, a brand new underground car
park
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has
introduced
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in
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on
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Elders street side, next to the
water
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feature.
Finally
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, the two entrances and
upper-left
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the upper-left
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corner rose
garden
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remained the same.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words park, water, garden with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "provided" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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