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In many countries today there are many highly qualified graduates without employment. What factors may have caused this situation and what, in your opinion, can/should be done about it?

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There are manifold nations where well-educated and skilled people become unemployed
due to
 some reasons
however
 I will discuss the most significant causes of why
this
 happens in some countries and how it can be tackled in the upcoming paragraphs. To commence with the imperative reasons why the majority of individuals become more and more unemployed in developing countries. The predominant cause is the explosion of population in developing nations. To elaborate on
this
, the graduated and well-educated are more than expected these young degree holders lead to stern competition.
For example
, a survey conducted by the Employees Welfare Department in India in 2021 revealed that the students who accomplished their studies were more than matching vacancies during the Covid-19 period. To tackle
this
, the government should run informative programmes that can help the masses to make able to family confinement.
Furthermore
, another problem behind
this
 approach is poor academic level and unmatching skills for the right recruitment. To explain
this
, the institutions that are run in under develop nations their schooling standards that are not up to the mark their standards of education are very low, students can get only bachelor's from these universities when it comes to interviews or exams that hold by the recruitment branches that time they become failures.
For instance
, a survey held by the government of Ethiopia In 2018 showed that 9 interviewers out of 10 were unable to pass their interview owing to the level of their study was not up to the mark. To solve
this
, the authority of the nation should give complete intervention in the education domain because literacy is the prominent pillar of the country and contribute to economical conditions. Taking everything into the consideration,
although
, the unexpected incline in the populace gives birth to hard competition
as well as
 the academic standards are not good yet I believe that these problems can be solved with the intervention of lawmakers.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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