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The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries. Summarize the informationby selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries. Summarize the informationby selecting and reporting the main feature, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph shows data about the usage of
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 all over the globe and the table illustrates information about two different countries about their
water
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consumption
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.
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, all three sectors showed an upward trend in
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 use in the
last
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 century but the agricultural domain remains the highest throughout. The table shows that Brazil consumed more
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 as compared to Congo in 2000. First of all, in 1900 global
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 usage in farmland was highest at about 500km and increased consistently until 1950
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 increase drastically up to 3000km.
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 industrial and domestic
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consumption
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 was more or less the same at the start and remained static until 1950,
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 increased. Industrial usage reached 900km and household
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 use reached 300km but still remained lowest of the all. The populations of Brazil and the Democratic Republic of Congo are incomparable.
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,
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consumption
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 per person in the former country was fee high up to 359m compared to later in which it was only 8m.
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, irrigated land used 26,500km of
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 in 2000
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 in Congo it was only 100km. In conclusion, globally and in Brazil particularly
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consumption
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 in the agricultural sector was high in 2000.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, consumption, km with synonyms.
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