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The Table below gives information about the three countries with the highest populations Summarise the information by selecting ad reporting the main features.

The Table below gives information about the three countries with the highest populations Summarise the information by selecting ad reporting the main features.
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The table compares the numbers of
people
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 in three different Countries (
China
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,
India
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 and the
USA
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) and illustrates The
population
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 increase percentages since 2017.
Overall
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, it can be seen that
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The highest
population
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 numbers were in
China
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 and
India
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,
whereas
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 The lowest
people
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 number was in
India
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.
Furthermore
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, The
percentage
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 of the
population
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 since 2017 was increased in
India
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 more than the other Countries. first of all, if we Look at the table chart we can find that
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 the number of
people
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 in
China
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 was 1.415 billion, which is the highest one Comparing with the other two countries. The density of
people
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 is very high in
India
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 at 455
people
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 per km square
while
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 the lowest numbers were in the
USA
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 at 36
people
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 per km².
on the other hand
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, there is a slight increase in
population
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percentage
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 since 2017. The lowest
percentage
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 was in
china
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 represented 0.39%. followed by the
USA
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 0.71%,
whereas
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 the highest increase in
population
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percentage
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 was taken place in
India
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 which accounted for 1.11%.
Moreover
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, the Proportion of
people
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 who live in urban
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 approximately accounted for 83% in the
USA
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.
While
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 in
China
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 and
India
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 were represented as 58%and 32% respectively.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas, while".
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, china, india, usa, population, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "represented" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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