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The he table and charts below give nformation on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. I'he table shows where the money came From and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main Features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The he table and charts below give nformation on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. I'he table shows where the money came From and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main Features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The Table charts illustrate data about the
police
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 budget resources and explain How The
money
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 was spent. In one area in Britain. In the years 2017 and 2018, the unit used is sterling bound. all, it can be seen that the main source of
police
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money
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 is the National government.
Furthermore
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, The salaries for officers and staff are the highest Consumption average of
police
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 budgets.
To begin
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, if we Look at The table we can find that the main source of
police
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 income is national government funding, it was about 175.5
m
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 in 2017 and 177.8m In 2018 respectively.
Then
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, The second important source is The
money
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 collected from the taxpayers ,
it
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 was bout 91.2 million pounds and 102.3
m
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 in The years 2017 and 2018 respectively. The other grants Contribute to the
police
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 budget with nearly equal amounts
about
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of about
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 38
m
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. In the second place, more than three-quarters of the
police
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money
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 was distributed in salaries for staff and officers. In 2017, The Salaries represented
as
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apply
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75%, and
then
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 slightly decreased to 69% in 2018.
However
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, in 2017 The
money
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 distributed in the technology section was 8% and
then
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 jumped to 14% in the following year.
Finally
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, The Budget is located for buildings and transport remain without any changes accounting
to
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for
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 14%.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words police, money, m with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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