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The table below shows the production of cacao beans in six regions between 1992 and 1998 .

The table below shows the production of cacao beans in six regions between 1992 and 1998 .
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The table illustrates the manufacturing of
cacao
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beans
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 in North and Central
America
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, Africa, Asia, Oceania, South
America
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 and England over 6 years from 1992 to 1998.
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, it can be seen that in Asia and in South
America
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 the quantity of produced
cacao
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beans
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 increased significantly higher than in other countries,
although
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 the development of
cacao
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beans
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 in North and Central
America
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 stayed the same despite some fluctuations. First of all, in 1992 the most developed place in
production
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the production
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 of
cacao
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beans
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 was South
America
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, 143 000
tons
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 respectively;
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 it decreased until 1996 and increased sharply after two years to 389 000
tons
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. But, in Asia where manufacturing of
cacao
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beans
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 had been increasing slowly during the whole period, from 119 000
tons
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 to 436 000
tons
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 of
cacao
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beans
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 precisely. The other region which made growing up in the development of
cacao
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beans
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 was Oceania and the production rose steadily for 6 years so that reached a peak at 76 890
tons
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at the end
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 of the period.
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, in Africa, England,and North and Central
America
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 releasing of
cacao
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beans
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 fluctuated from 1992 to 1998, so that in Africa and England it fell from 29 000 to 25 000
tons
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 and 56 000 to 49 000
tons
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 per year;
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 in spite of changes in manufacturing in the North and the Central
USA
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 the numbers of
cacao
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beans
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 produced did not change and stayed at 46 000
tons
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 in 1998.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cacao, beans, america, tons with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
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