The diagram gives information about the process of making carbonated drinks. Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram gives information about the process of making carbonated drinks.

Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graphic shows an informative process of producing carbonated drinks.
Overall
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, there are five man-made stages in producing carbonated drinks. It begins with
water
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that is
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added as a raw material
then
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undergoes the process of cleansing, evaporation, mixing and filtering stage and
finally
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packing which leads to delivery to the stores. First of all, the raw
water
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passes slowly through the filtering stage where a chemical is added to soften the
water
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. After that, the
water
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is pumped into the electric heaters and goes to the cooling pipe.
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, in the carbon dioxide machine, the
water
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reacts to produce carbonated
water
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. Following that, it is placed in the mixing tank for the addition of flavour, colour and syrup.
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, the carbonated
water
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is filtered once again before it fills the bottles and cans.
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, once packed it is placed in multiple boxes and can be transported to various supermarkets.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "finally".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Filtration
  • Water softening
  • Chemical treatment
  • Evaporation
  • Cooling pipe
  • Carbonation
  • Carbon dioxide
  • High pressure
  • Syrup
  • Flavor
  • Color
  • Stirring
  • Uniformity
  • Secondary filtration
  • Bottling
  • Canning
  • Packaging
  • Distribution
  • Retail outlets
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