The diagram gives information about the process of making carbonated drinks. Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graphic shows an informative process of producing carbonated drinks.
Overall
, there are five man-made stages in producing carbonated drinks. It begins with water
that is
added as a raw material then
undergoes the process of cleansing, evaporation, mixing and filtering stage and finally
packing which leads to delivery to the stores.
First of all, the raw water
passes slowly through the filtering stage where a chemical is added to soften the water
. After that, the water
is pumped into the electric heaters and goes to the cooling pipe. In addition
, in the carbon dioxide machine, the water
reacts to produce carbonated water
.
Following that, it is placed in the mixing tank for the addition of flavour, colour and syrup. Moreover
, the carbonated water
is filtered once again before it fills the bottles and cans. Finally
, once packed it is placed in multiple boxes and can be transported to various supermarkets.Submitted by namlaemy on
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