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The funding of a police force in a British region between 2017 and 2018 is highlighted in the table while the distribution of those funds during the same period is shown in two pie charts.

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The table illustrates the funding of a police force in a British region in 2017 and 2018,
while
 the two pie charts present the distribution of those funds during these periods.
Overall
, the total funding increased; meanwhile, technology was the only area whose
expenditure
 rose. In 2017, the police force received a total of £304.7
million
, with £175.5
million
 coming from the national government, £91.2
million
 from local taxes, and £38
million
 from other sources. The majority of the
expenditure
, 75%, was spent on officer and staff remuneration, followed by buildings and transport at 17%. Technology had the lowest proportion of funding at 8%. In 2018, the total budget grew to £318.6
million
, with a rise in funding from all sources. The national government contributed £177.8
million
,
while
 local taxes and other sources provided £102.3
million
 and £38.5
million
, respectively.
Expenditure
 on wages remained the highest at 69%, but technology's proportion climbed to 14%. Buildings and transport had the same proportion of
expenditure
 as in the previous year, at 17%.
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