The graph below shows female unemployment rates in each country of the United Kingdom in 2013 and 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows female unemployment rates in each country of the United Kingdom in 2013 and 2014.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart shows the unemployment rates among
women
in the countries that make up the United Kingdom, both in 2013 and 2014. There has generally been a small decrease in female unemployment rates from 2013 to 2014, except in Scotland. In 2013, 5.6% of
women
in Northern Ireland were unemployed. The only country with a smaller
percentage
of
women
unemployed was Wales, with a rate of 5.4%. Both countries saw a decrease in the
percentage
of unemployed
women
in 2014. In Northern Ireland, the
percentage
fell to 4.6% and in ,Wales it fell to 5%. England had the greatest
percentage
of unemployed
women
in 2013, with 6.8%.
However
,
this
decreased by 0.3% in 2014.
Lastly
, Scotland was the only country which had an increasing
percentage
of unemployed
women
. In 2013, it had 6.1% of
women
were out of work.
This
increased to 6.7% in 2014, making it the country with the highest female unemployment rate of the four countries.
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