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The flow chart illustrates the consequences of deforestation. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

The flow chart illustrates the consequences of deforestation. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.
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the flow chart below
demonstrate
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 the consequences of logging
of
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apply
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trees on our society and biodiversity. A
clear cutting
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 of forests
firstly
 compresses the
soil
due to
 the use of heavy logging equipment. once the
soil
 is compressed, it becomes hard and “baked” whilst rain waters
run off
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runoff
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 leading to flooding.
Secondly
, Once trees are
cutted
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cut
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,
top
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topsoil
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soil
 erodes as fewer roots hold the
top
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topsoil
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soil
 in place, drought increases
due to
 less precipitation as
result
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a result
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 of plants returning less moisture to the air,
micro-organisms
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and micro-organisms
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 feeding on waste are lost
as a result
 of the destruction of waste wood from logging
due to
 increasing of risk of deliberate or accidental burning. Because of those actions, pioneer species move in, vegetation is degraded
so
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and
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 many species are endangered
therefore
 the biodiversity decreases. In conclusion, logging of hardwoods led indirectly to flooding and loss of biodiversity.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "due to".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words soil with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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