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The flow chart illustrates the consequences of deforestation. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

The flow chart illustrates the consequences of deforestation. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.
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the flow chart below
demonstrate
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 the consequences of logging
of
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apply
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trees on our society and biodiversity. A
clear cutting
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clear-cutting
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 of forests
firstly
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 compresses the
soil
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due to
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 the use of heavy logging equipment. once the
soil
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 is compressed, it becomes hard and “baked” whilst rain waters
run off
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runoff
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 leading to flooding.
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, Once trees are
cutted
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cut
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,
top
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topsoil
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soil
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 erodes as fewer roots hold the
top
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topsoil
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soil
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 in place, drought increases
due to
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 less precipitation as
result
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a result
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 of plants returning less moisture to the air,
micro-organisms
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and micro-organisms
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 feeding on waste are lost
as a result
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 of the destruction of waste wood from logging
due to
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 increasing of risk of deliberate or accidental burning. Because of those actions, pioneer species move in, vegetation is degraded
so
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and
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 many species are endangered
therefore
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 the biodiversity decreases. In conclusion, logging of hardwoods led indirectly to flooding and loss of biodiversity.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "due to".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words soil with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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