Nowadays, it is possible to move ocean creatures from their natural habitat at sea and have them relocated in amusement parks for the purpose of people’s recreation. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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At present days marine creatures shift from their natural places to entertainment
parks
for the sake of human recreation.
This
essay will examine the advantages and disadvantages to a logical conclusion. The advantages of moving marine
animals
bring impact their growth and missing in the
life
of the ocean.
Firstly
some
animals
capture at very early ages and separated from their mothers
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impact the babies’ growth mentally, and
as well as
that effect shortness of their
life
.
Secondly
, they do not have enough space to move freely or do activities.
Although
they could not communicate with humans, they will spend stress full
life
in the entertainment
parks
.
For example
dolphins and sea lions and
as well as
penguins. Nowadays it is common to see these kinds kind of
animals
in amusement
parks
with less
of
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freedom. Losing
their
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habitant places they spend stressful
life
bring
the
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impact of their
life
threat.
On the other hand
as an advantage sea creatures can
be observe
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well and can gather information, especially for
the
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education
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purpose.
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researchers can do close observations
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these creatures more than their living places.
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,
this
brings
good
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income
source
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as well as
entertainment for kids.
While
so many people tend to visit the
parks
brings economic incensement and kids can learn more about these
animals
well. So
this
helps not only provide knowledge but
also
bring joy. In
conclusion
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however
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there are
some
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certain consequences the
animals
have to face with lack of nutrition,
as well as
loneliness from their natural
habitants
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, bringing unbalance in their
life
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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