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Children should play online games nowadays. Discuss advantages and disadvantages.

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Introduction
What is
kid's
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the kid's
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 famous hobby in
this
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 period?
Online
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The online
An online
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game
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 is the answer.
Benefits
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The benefits
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 and drawbacks of playing
online
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the online
an online
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game
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games
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 will be discussed
on
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in
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 the essay.
Body paragraph 1
There are three reasons for
support
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supporting
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idea
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the idea
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 that
kids
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 should play
online
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an online
the online
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game
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games
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.
First
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The first
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 is to make
friend
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friends
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, some
kids
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 have many
friend
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friends
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 from playing online.
Second
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The second
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 is to improve
english
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English
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skill
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skills
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 because it is
language
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a language
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 that
mostly
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is mostly
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 used
in
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in-game
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game
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,
kid
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kids
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 have to read
instuction
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instruction
instructions
 in
english
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English
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 and that
are
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is
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reason
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the reason
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 why some
gamer
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gamers
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good
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are good
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in
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at
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english
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English
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.
Lastly
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, the way of thinking is
deleloped
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developed
, some
kids
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 dare to
make
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take
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 action and some
kid
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kids
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 have
new
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a new
the new
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idea
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ideas
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 from playing
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game
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games
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 and have critical thinking.
Body paragraph 2
However
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, Some people argue children will be addicted and not
attended
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attend
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 other activities
such
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 as doing homework. That
result
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results
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 in their grade,
most
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and most
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 of them get
low
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a low
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score
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scores
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 and failed the exam.
Moreover
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,
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kids
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kids'
kid's
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personality
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personalities
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 would
became
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become
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 impolite because of rude words
in
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in-game
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game
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 chat.
Conclusion
Therefore
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,
everythings
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everything
 have pros and cons, parent
sholud
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should
 control the
kids
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 in
play
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playing
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game
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 to ensure that
it
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isit
wasit
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 good for them.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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