Children should play online games nowadays. Discuss advantages and disadvantages.

What is
kid's
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famous hobby in
this
period?
Online
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The online
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game
is the answer.
Benefits
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The benefits
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and drawbacks of playing
online
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the online
an online
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game
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games
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will be discussed
on
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in
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the essay. There are three reasons for
support
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supporting
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idea
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the idea
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that
kids
should play
online
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an online
the online
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game
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games
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.
First
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The first
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is to make
friend
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friends
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, some
kids
have many
friend
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friends
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from playing online.
Second
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The second
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is to improve
english
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skill
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skills
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because it is
language
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a language
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that
mostly
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is mostly
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used
in
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in-game
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game
,
kid
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kids
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have to read
instuction
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instruction
instructions
in
english
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English
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and that
are
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is
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reason
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the reason
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why some
gamer
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gamers
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good
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are good
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in
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at
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english
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English
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.
Lastly
, the way of thinking is
deleloped
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developed
, some
kids
dare to
make
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take
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action and some
kid
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kids
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have
new
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a new
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idea
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ideas
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from playing
game
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games
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and have critical thinking.
However
, Some people argue children will be addicted and not
attended
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other activities
such
as doing homework. That
result
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results
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in their grade,
most
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and most
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of them get
low
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a low
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score
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scores
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and failed the exam.
Moreover
,
kids
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kids'
kid's
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personality
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personalities
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would
became
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become
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impolite because of rude words
in
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in-game
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game
chat.
Therefore
,
everythings
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everything
have pros and cons, parent
sholud
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should
control the
kids
in
play
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playing
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game
to ensure that
it
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isit
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good for them.
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