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More and more people today are drinking sugar based drinks. Why is this happening? What measures can be taken to reverse this trend?

#people #sugar #drinks #measures #trend
Nowadays
sugarly
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sugary
sugar
drinks
is
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are
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 more
various
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 than it was in the past. Some
drinks
 have more
sugar
 than and
amount
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the amount
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 that
human
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humans
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 should have per day.
This
 rise
up
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in
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 the number of
diabete
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diabetes
 and
obersity
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obesity
 patients in
this
 period. Reasons why
people
 drink more and more sweet beverages and solutions to solve
this
 problem. What are sweet
drinks
 that you ever
drinks
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? Soft
drinks
, Cola,
Milk shakes
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Milkshakes
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, or Yogurt. Why did you choose to drink those? Some
people
 drank these because of
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the trend
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trend
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 from social media. Some
people
 have it because it is
thier
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their
 favourite.
Moveover
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Moreover
, some
people
 have to
had
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 it
everyday
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every day
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 or in
another word
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other words
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 they
addict
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are addict
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 to it which
related
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is related
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 to the statement that
sugar
 is
the
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a
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 legal addiction
substances
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substance
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. There are many ways to solve
this
 problem.
Firstly
, choose to
drinking
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drink
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 water
instead
 , water is always good for your health.
Secondly
 , select
the
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a
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 sweetless beverage
such
 as juice
that
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apply
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made from friut that have less
sugar
 and
not
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does not
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 add
sugar
.
Thirdly
, Put less
sugar
 in your
drinks
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, for example,
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for example
 you have to reduce
amount
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the amount
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 that you put in
normal
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a normal
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 time,
replace
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and replace
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 four
spoon
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spoons
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 of
sugar
 with three
spoon
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spoons
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 of
sugar
.
Lastly
, use alternative sweet products or
substance
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substances
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 that create zero
sugar
 , there are two types which are natural and chemical.
However
, it
also
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is also
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 a
Government
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 duty to fix
this
.
goverment
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government
 should collect taxes
from
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on
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 extra
sugar
drinks
 and make laws
of
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for
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the creator
a creator
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creator
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creators
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 to
wrote
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write
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 the detail.
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