As child obesity becomes a serious health issue in today’s society, some people feel that TV commercials advertising junk food aimed at kids should not be shown before 9pm. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

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point is the question - do we have any connection between socio-demographic students' characteristics and their involvement in
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? There are some restrictions: the research will focus on
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students; data will
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information only from one LMS, and only from students 22+ years old. Right now we have at least three different definitions of “involvement” in education, and,
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particularly. We don’t know how to choose
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factors of involvement. As one more point of interest, I’d like to mention that we already know a lot about offline education inequality,
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of it is based on socio-demographic reasons. But, it’s not clear do we have the same level of inequality in
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, and is the correlation between them the same? B Method For
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. C Your destination My finished project will look like some graphics with explanations. Hopefully, I’d find any correlation between
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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