Fatherhood ought to be emphasized as much as motherhood. The idea that women are solely responsible for deciding whether or not to have babies leads on to the idea that they are also responsible for bringing the children up.
Although
, its
Change the word
the
mother
who
upholds a decision to conceive, still, Correct pronoun usage
apply
this
doesn’t means that we impose the responsibility
of kid’s
upbringing Correct article usage
the kid’s
particularly
on her. Nurturing a child is considered a mutual Add the comma(s)
,particularly
responsibility
of parents and avoiding that can impact
severely on child’s development
. Analyzing far reaching
Add a hyphen
far-reaching
impact
upon the absence ofCorrect article usage
the
father’s
role
in the kid’s development
. Therefore
, Father’s
responsibility
must be emphasized to avoid any far reaching
Add a hyphen
far-reaching
impact
on the child’s upbringing.
Modern world
women are much career oriented as Add a hyphen
Modern-world
compare
to the Wrong verb form
compared
the
previous generations & they want much flexibility to pursue their Remove the redundancy
apply
career
and to Fix the agreement mistake
careers
fulfill
their aspirations. In Change the spelling
fulfil
parallel
she Add a comma
,parallel
also
have
to Change the verb form
has
fulfill
the Change the spelling
fulfil
child rearing
Add a hyphen
child-rearing
responsibility
. Thus
a
pressure of dual Correct article usage
the
responsibilities
is not justifiable in anyways. On the contrary
, if she’s not able to fulfill
her Change the spelling
fulfil
responsibility
of rearing than
serious consequences will come up in terms of children’s emotional security and can put Correct your spelling
then
severe
Correct article usage
a severe
impact
. For example
, Children’s
require much attention in formidable years and If Change noun form
Children
mother
is not able to prioritize the Add an article
the mother
a mother
responsibilities
of their children then
a a
wide gap in their Remove the redundancy
apply
development
will create which will put significant
Correct article usage
a significant
impact
in
their future life.
To curb Change preposition
on
dwon
the negative effects Correct your spelling
down
father’s
must step up and upholds the Change the noun form
fathers
father
mother
’s responsibility
and to
support them. Fix the infinitive
apply
Although
the traditional role
of the father is to full fill the financial responsibilities
of his family in this
contemporary era Fatherhood role
is much required to manage and support the activities which mothers usually do. For example
, Changing nappies to
their children and feeding food to the scion will give more ease Change preposition
for
while
the mother
is on job or doing rest and hence
mother’s
will feel a sense of peace and sharing of Change noun form
mothers
responsibility
will be more influential in the development
of the children.
To recapitulate, Rearing a child must be considered a mutual responsibility
. Therefore
, Father’s
role
requires much
Change the quantifier
many
responsibilities
to balance the burden of responsibilities
on the mother
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