Fatherhood ought to be emphasized as much as motherhood. The idea that women are solely responsible for deciding whether or not to have babies leads on to the idea that they are also responsible for bringing the children up.

Although
,
its
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mother
who
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upholds a decision to conceive, still,
this
doesn’t means that we impose the
responsibility
of
kid’s
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the kid’s
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upbringing
particularly
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,particularly
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on her. Nurturing a child is considered a mutual
responsibility
of parents and avoiding that can
impact
severely on child’s
development
. Analyzing
far reaching
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impact
upon the absence of
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father’s
role
in the kid’s
development
.
Therefore
,
Father’s
responsibility
must be emphasized to avoid any
far reaching
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impact
on the child’s upbringing.
Modern world
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women are much career oriented as
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to the
the
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previous generations & they want much flexibility to pursue their
career
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careers
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and to
fulfill
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fulfil
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their aspirations. In
parallel
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she
also
have
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to
fulfill
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fulfil
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the
child rearing
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child-rearing
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responsibility
.
Thus
a
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pressure of dual
responsibilities
is not justifiable in anyways.
On the contrary
, if she’s not able to
fulfill
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fulfil
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her
responsibility
of rearing
than
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then
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serious consequences will come up in terms of children’s emotional security and can put
severe
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a severe
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impact
.
For example
,
Children’s
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Children
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require much attention in formidable years and If
mother
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the mother
a mother
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is not able to prioritize the
responsibilities
of their children
then
a
a
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wide gap in their
development
will create which will put
significant
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a significant
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impact
in
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their future life. To curb
dwon
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down
the negative effects
father’s
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fathers
father
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must step up and upholds the
mother
’s
responsibility
and
to
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support them.
Although
the traditional
role
of the father is to full fill the financial
responsibilities
of his family in
this
contemporary era Fatherhood
role
is much required to manage and support the activities which mothers usually do.
For example
, Changing nappies
to
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for
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their children and feeding food to the scion will give more ease
while
the
mother
is on job or doing rest and
hence
mother’s
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mothers
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will feel a sense of peace and sharing of
responsibility
will be more influential in the
development
of the children. To recapitulate, Rearing a child must be considered a mutual
responsibility
.
Therefore
,
Father’s
role
requires
much
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responsibilities
to balance the burden of
responsibilities
on the
mother
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • 1. Equal Parenting
  • 2. Gender Roles
  • 3. Societal Expectations
  • 4. Emotional Well-being
  • 5. Psychological Development
  • 6. Legal Frameworks
  • 7. Workplace Policies
  • 8. Gender Equality
  • 9. Traditional Responsibilities
  • 10. Active Fatherhood
  • 11. Balanced Development
  • 12. Undue Burden
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