The table below shows the results of a survey that asked 6800 Scottish adults (aged 16 years and over) whether they had taken part in different cultural activities in the past 12 months.

The table below shows the results of a survey that asked 6800 Scottish adults (aged 16 years and over) whether they had taken part in different cultural activities in the past 12 months.
The provided table graph demonstrated the proportion of the results of a survey that 6800 Scottish adults all aged 16 and over, namely different cultural
activities
the 12 months duration.
Overall
, It can see be clear that any performance and any visual arts an escalate significantly by about 30% and 35%
this
16-24,
however
,
this
also
dwindled by approximately 10% to 17% by Undertaking any crafts, Cultural purchases, Any writing
as well as
Computer based. The percentages of 24 to 44 that any performance modestly augmented at 22%,
nevertheless
, three cultural
activities
decreased slowly at both 17 and 16, involving undertaking any crafts, cultural purchases and any visual arts.
Furthermore
, any writing and computer-based are 6% and 9% the lowest level in the proportion. Between 45 and 74 was a fluctuation from the four
activities
,
however
, Any writing and computer-based are 5% bottom out in the percentage. The highest level was 22% and 19 from Any performance and Undertaking any crafts.
In addition
, The higher point of 16% and 15% for Cultural purchases and any visual arts and Any writing and computer-based was 7% and 6% insignificant, that All aged 16 and over of the percentage. In conclusion, the table chart indicated the proportion of all ages that four cultural
activities
were overwhelming than two
activities
were sufficient.
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