Some people say that educational success depends most of the time on having a good teacher. Other say that attitude of students also matters? Discuss both views and give your opinion

Education
is the key factor for success.Over the few
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decades
,the views toward the
education
system had dramatically changed, all over the world.some
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thought good
education
is directly proportional to the best teacher,
while
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said that
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students
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students'
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own ability matters.I would explain in
this
essay both
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and my opinion.
Due to
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various reasons, people thought good
teachers
are pillars of
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success. As children are not much aware
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the system of
the
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education
they need proper guidelines from experts ones.
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, all
students
have not same thoughts ,emotions and ability so
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support and
encourages
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in their
education
best
teachers
is essential.
For example
, famous psychologist Albert
Bundura
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Bandura
said that children are like
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wet
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, ( as they can
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any pots)
like
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that even children
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them
according to
our wishes so,if they did not get
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guidance they would take
wrong
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paths
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. On the other
hands
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hand
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,
this
is the technology era, without individual guidelines we can be successful in life . As there are so many websites,
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video's
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which can guide
students
in any field.
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, if a student
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are not interest
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in science he / she
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passion
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towards sports even a
scientic
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scientific
scientist
cannot teach them science.
Furthermore
, Mr Mark who is the founder of
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was not guided
from
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teachers
or trainers he become
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millionear
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million
by
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curiosity and
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feels
heels
peels
. In my opinion, I don't thinks
best
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teachers
are essential in
this
era as in undeveloped countries like Nepal
students
can't gets books in the
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regions (rural area) they manage their
education
from
youtubes
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YouTube
and websites. In conclusion,
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some
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extents
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proper guidelines are essential but not
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all the
times
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its
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all depends on ability.
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