The first graph gives the number of passengers travelling by train in Sydney. The second graph provides information on the percentage of trains running on time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The first graph gives the number of passengers travelling by train in Sydney. The second graph provides information on the percentage of trains running on time.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graphs give information about the railway in Syndey regarding the number of
trains
running on time and the number of passengers using
this
transport mode from the
year
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1995- 2005.
Initially
, when the
trains
were introduced for the first time in Sydney, only a few people (approximately 250)used
this
mode. Though the count went up slowly, until the
year
2001 when there was a steep increase, reaching the peak ( 300 per train). With advancements in other methods and more delays in
trains
, there was a sudden fall, after which, it attracted a constant part of society.
Initially
, as they were few people almost all the
trains
were up to the time.But, with increasing popularity
trains
could not keep up the schedule so their efficiency decreased to 85 per cent. After a few corrections, the rate was was between 90 - 85 with ups and downs. Until
,
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the
year
2000 there is a drastic fall in the efficacy reaching its bottom 70 per cent by the
year
2004. In conclusion, through the decade , the usage has increased
while
the per cent of delayed
trains
increased.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "initially".
Vocabulary: Replace the words trains, year with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • passenger volume
  • trend
  • peak times
  • off-peak times
  • punctuality
  • infrastructure
  • correlation
  • traffic
  • delays
  • satisfaction
  • efficiency
  • transportation system
  • reliability
  • urban mobility
  • capacity
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