Some people thinks computer games have negative impacts on computer. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

In
this
contemporary era, technology has increased at an alarming rate. A few individuals argued that
computer
games
have a negative
effect
on children’s minds and others tend that
this
is
the
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good way
for
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entertain .
According to
my
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perspective
prespective
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perspective
, I disagree with
this
statement to a great extent On the one hand, some pupils believe that
computer
games
gives a negative
effect
on children’s life and mind
also
. First and foremost is that
,
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they cannot concentrate on their work and
study
well. If they play video
games
on computers every day, they would not give
time
to their
study
and not be able to focus on
it
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.
Secondly
, it is
also
having a bad
effect
on their health
such
as mind, body behaviour and eyes as
also
, If they spend all their
time
playing, they would face numerous kinds of problems just
like
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back pain, headache , brain fatigue , eye side weak , aggressive and many more.
For example
, a survey taken by the
Time
of
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New York newspaper , in America, in 2016, was that 64% of the majority waste their
time
to
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playing
games
on
computer
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.
On the other hand
, Playing different kinds of
games
on
computer
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is a very good thing .
Firstly
, it is a source of entertainment . If they feel bored in their
study
then
they can refresh their mind and body by playing
on
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it. After that, they feel relaxed and fresh
,
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and can give
full
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focus on their
study
.
Secondly
, it is
also
a source of knowledge .
Due to
this
, they can gain several skills about it
such
as
,
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typing skills, information about tools and computers , use
the
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internet , social media and goggles etc. For illustrate, a survey taken by the
Time
of USA newspaper , in America, in 2017, was that playing video
games
on
computer
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has increased from 64% to 87% in the past 5 years. In conclusion , after deliberating all the positive factors of playing video
games
on
computer
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.
Although
using technology for entertainment ,knowledge and information
are
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a very good thing ,and it is very beneficial for children and others. Yet, it
also
had a side
effect
on them
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