SOME PEOPLE FEEL THAT ENTERTAINERS ARE PAID TOO MUCH DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE? WHICH OTHER TYPES OF JOB SHOULD BE HIGHLY PAID
There are some who believe that entertainers are getting paid too much money in
regards
to their job. I think other jobs in the area of Fix the agreement mistake
regard
education
or health should be better paid.
Firstly
, entertainers are not doing anything for the community. They are not putting their life at risk.For
example
, doctors or nurses who are in direct contact with pandemics, such
as Covid 19 where many of them left their life
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people
that they did not know. Furthermore
, entertainers just offer distraction
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a distraction
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society keeping them out of real life.
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Secondly
, because sport is a huge industry
where advertising industry
and betting are involved and it involves a lot of money, they are getting incredible salaries that exceed the normal wages. For
example
, soccer matches not only involve the price of the entry but also
involve advertising and because millions of people
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to reach as many customers as they can. Furthermore
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Thirdly
, I think that jobs that involve education
or health should be the best paid in the world,
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as well as
people
working in the health system. For
example
, doctors who are living to care for others and saving many lives should be the highest paid in the world.
To conclude
, while
money is still involved in the entertainment industry
, it will be really well paid. On the other hand
, people
who are working really hard for the education
of the country and taking care of the population,
will still earn basic salaries.Remove the comma
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