Public health is becoming an urgent issue now a days. some argue that government should create nutrition ad food choice law to improve public health while others believe that it is a matter of personal choice and responsibility. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some argue that
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should be responsible
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public
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while
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others believe it is the sole responsibility of the
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because nowadays
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people
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's
health
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is one of the major
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.
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, others believe that
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should combat malnutrition in the country, having
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good
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should be more concerning to the citizens.  It is said to believe that
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should
should
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ensure that the
people
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are having enough food to avoid hunger. They are responsible
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monitoring the
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of stocks available in the country and should subsidize the value for the benefit of the citizens.
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, the food and drug administration is the agency that protects and
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the rights to
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of
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Filipinos and
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resulting
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in
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a decrease
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decrease
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decreased
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number of malnutrition in the nation.
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, I believe that an individual should be responsible
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maintaining
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good
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.
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, having a healthy body is a personal choice.
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should be more optimistic in looking for one's welfare and not relying
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the
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. Having
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good
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is crucial to avoid straining the
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's budget for the budget should be allotted
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to
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more important projects
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as road
infrastracture
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infrastructure
and providing jobs to
people
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.
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, eating a
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diet and
exrecises
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exercises
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are
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one of the many ways on improving
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.  In conclusion, public
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is something
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that should
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be address
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nowadays.
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, others believe that
government
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should promote
health
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to every mankind. I believe that
people
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should be more
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with their own
body
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bodies
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to achieve
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good
health
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. As the saying says "
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is Wealth".
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