Some people think sports games are important for society, while others believe they should be taken as leisure activities. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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argument over the issue that number of individuals believe

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notion that pupils should have to participate in leisure

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view which are substantial.The first and foremost reason is playing

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and video

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their concentration power as per playing

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gives pupils

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more benefits

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as enhanced mentality power.Adding more to it nowadays learners like to play video

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on tv,computer and mobile phone

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playing of these

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and

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they can learn so many

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like they can get the knowledge about the different

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kinds of modern apps which is more beneficial for the society. Probing ahead individuals who believe to take part in leisure activity as per my concern

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have must need to take participate in football,painting,hockey,tennis,cricket etc.

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,playing fun

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will help children to enhance their curiosity.

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children can

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make their

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in leisure

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and they can

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their desire and dream as well.

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Arjun Erigaisi is a famous

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player who played

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since his childhood and after he make his profession as now he is

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player he won so many gold medals in

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all the

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and

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games

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have

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own stand.

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all depends on learners which

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they are interested in and which field they want to polish their

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and knowledge.

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Logical structure

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Your opinion

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