Some people think sports games are important for society, while others believe they should be taken as leisure activities. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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this

contemporary epoch,there is

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argument over the issue that number of individuals believe

sports

and

games

are necessary for

community

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.Whiles others oppose

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notion that pupils should have to participate in leisure

activities

such

as painting,

chess

,table tennis etc.

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essay concurs

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formal

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mentioned

phenomenan

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phenomenon

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logical conclusion. There

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adequate evidence of

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view which are substantial.The first and foremost reason is playing

sports

and video

games

helps

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children to

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up their

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as well as

also

help

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increase

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their concentration power as per playing

games

and

sports

gives pupils

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more benefits

such

as enhanced mentality power.Adding more to it nowadays learners like to play video

games

on tv,computer and mobile phone

while

playing of these

games

and

sports

they can learn so many

thinks

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things

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like they can get the knowledge about the different

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kinds of modern apps which is more beneficial for the society. Probing ahead individuals who believe to take part in leisure activity as per my concern

childrens

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children

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have must need to take participate in football,painting,hockey,tennis,cricket etc.

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activities

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will help children to enhance their curiosity.

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children can

also

make their

career

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in leisure

activities

and they can

fulfill

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their desire and dream as well.

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example

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Arjun Erigaisi is a famous

chess

player who played

chess

since his childhood and after he make his profession as now he is

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chess

player he won so many gold medals in

chess

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all the

activities

and

games

are important every

games

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game

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have

their

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its

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own stand.

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its

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all depends on learners which

activities

they are interested in and which field they want to polish their

skill

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and knowledge.

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Some people think sports games are important for society, while others believe they should be taken as leisure activities. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Your opinion

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Some people like to work in small companies or businesses while others prefer working for large companies or government organizations. What are the advantages and disadvantages of working for a large company or organization?

The world has many towns and cities constructed in previous centuries that were more suitable and livable for people in those times than they are now. What problems will this cause? What can be done to solve these problems?

Some people think secondary school students and high school students should be allowed to choose academic courses leading to university or practical courses leading to careers such as carpenters. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In many countries, traditional foods are being replaced by international fast food. This is having a negative effect on both families and societies. To what extent do you agree or disagree

It is observed that in many countries not enough students are choosing to study science as a subject. What are the causes? And what will be the effects on society?

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