Some people think sports games are important for society, while others believe they should be taken as leisure activities. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
In
this
contemporary epoch,there is heated
argument over the issue that number of individuals believe Add an article
a heated
the heated
sports
and games
are necessary for community
.Whiles others oppose Add an article
the community
this
notion that pupils should have to participate in leisure Correct determiner usage
the
activities
such
as painting,chess
,table tennis etc.This
essay concurs in
Change preposition
with
Correct article usage
the formal
formal
mentioned Change the adjective
formally
phenomenan
.Correct your spelling
phenomenon
phenomena
However
,both the
view will Correct article usage
apply
be discuss
in Change the verb form
be discussed
upcoming
paragraph with Add an article
an upcoming
the upcoming
the
logical conclusion.
There Correct article usage
a
are
adequate evidence of Change the verb form
is
this
view which are substantial.The first and foremost reason is playing sports
and video games
helps
children to Change the verb form
help
grown
up their Wrong verb form
grow
mind
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minds
as well as
also
help in
Change preposition
apply
increase
their concentration power as per playing Change the form of the verb
increasing
games
and sports
gives pupils to
more benefits Change preposition
apply
such
as enhanced mentality power.Adding more to it nowadays learners like to play video games
on tv,computer and mobile phone while
playing of these games
and sports
they can learn so many thinks
like they can get the knowledge about the different Correct your spelling
things
different
kinds of modern apps which is more beneficial for the society.
Probing ahead individuals who believe to take part in leisure activity as per my concern Remove the redundancy
apply
childrens
have must need to take participate in football,painting,hockey,tennis,cricket etc.Correct your spelling
children
Moreover
,playing fun activities
it
will help children to enhance their curiosity.Correct pronoun usage
apply
Additionally
children can Add a comma
,Additionally
also
make their career
in leisure Fix the agreement mistake
careers
activities
and they can fulfill
their desire and dream as well.Change the spelling
fulfil
For
example
Arjun Erigaisi is a famous Add a comma
,example
chess
player who played chess
since his childhood and after he make his profession as now he is famous
Correct article usage
a famous
chess
player he won so many gold medals in chess
.
To conclude
,in my opinion
all the Add a comma
,opinion
activities
and games
are important every games
have Change to a singular noun
game
their
own stand.Correct pronoun usage
its
However
,its
all depends on learners which Correct pronoun usage
it
activities
they are interested in and which field they want to polish their skill
and knowledge.Fix the agreement mistake
skills
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