The charts below show the primary hobbies of the adult residents in a small Tunisian town. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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table shows the people who have the first hobbies among adults in a Tunisian town from 1980 to 2020.

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, there are some slight shifts in whole hobbies.

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TV and movies, books, and working out gradually went up, banking, gardening, and

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games

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steadily declined. Playing music remained the same figure given that period.

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the chart, TV and movies significantly increased and peaked at 160 in 2020, which was the highest total given that period and

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quadrupled the number of residents in

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. Working out fluctuated over the 40-year period but eventually grew up from 2000 to 2020. The number of books, reaching a high of 133, was almost double of gardening which hit a low of 67 in 2020.

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games

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substantially declined and

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became the lowest figure among hobbies. The total of

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almost doubled

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number in 2000.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

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