The charts below show the primary hobbies of the adult residents in a small Tunisian town. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

This
table shows the people who have the first hobbies among adults in a Tunisian town from 1980 to 2020.
Overall
, there are some slight shifts in whole hobbies.
Whereas
TV and movies, books, and working out gradually went up, banking, gardening, and
video
games
steadily declined. Playing music remained the same figure given that period.
According to
the chart, TV and movies significantly increased and peaked at 160 in 2020, which was the highest total given that period and
also
quadrupled the number of residents in
video
games
. Working out fluctuated over the 40-year period but eventually grew up from 2000 to 2020. The number of books, reaching a high of 133, was almost double of gardening which hit a low of 67 in 2020.
Video
games
substantially declined and
finally
became the lowest figure among hobbies. The total of
video
games
almost doubled
of
Change preposition
in
show examples
TV and
movies's
Change noun form
movies
show examples
number in 2000.
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