You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The pie charts below show the percentage of time working adults spent on different activities in a particular country in 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

You should write at least 150 words.
The given pie charts indicate how much
time
were
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was
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spent
by
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on
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6 different activities which
worker
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work
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in
particular
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a particular
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country did in 1958 and 2008.
Overall
,
the
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apply
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most
of
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apply
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people spent their
time
on
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working, and the second
popular
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most popular
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of
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apply
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activity was sleeping. In detail, the percentage of working was occupied 33% in 1958,
while
that of working was 42% in 2008. 8% of people spent their
time
on
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relaxing at home in 1958, which was
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an increase
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increase
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increased
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at
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to
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13% in 2008. In terms of travel to work and
toehr
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other
interests
of
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in
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playing sports, the percentage was 2% and 6% in 1958, each. Those categories
was
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increased in 2008 (8% and 8%).
In contrast
, 32% of people spent their
time
on
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sleeping in 1958, which was much
than
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more than
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the percentage of 2008's sleeping category (25%). Especially, the figure for going out stood up
19
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at 19
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% in 1958, which was
decrease
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decreased
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at
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to
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6% in 2008.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pie chart
  • percentage
  • activities
  • working adults
  • summarise
  • report
  • main features
  • comparisons
  • relevant
  • time spent
  • work-related
  • leisure
  • personal care
  • travel
  • noticeable trends
  • over a period
  • devoted
  • significant changes
  • contrast
  • compare
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