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You were recently impressed by a staff member at a supermarket. Write a letter to the manager of the supermarket. In your letter: • Describe the situation • Explain how you were helped • State what you are going to do as a result of this good experience

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to
appreciate
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thank
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 your supermarket's member of staff Mr Kevin who helped me in a dire situation. I went there
last
 week for home groceries. I left my wallet at the fish counter and
move
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moved
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 to explore more items. All of
sudden
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a sudden
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, I
realise
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realised
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 that I
am
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was
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 missing my wallet. Immediately, I informed the cash counter and informed to supervisor Mr Kevin. After knowing the situation, he
close
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closed
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 all the exit gates straightaway and started asking me the questionnaires about the location I stopped by. He initiated the inspection and found the wallet at the fish counter. Which not only saved my time but
also
 many important documents. By doing
this
 help, I am highly impressed by the well-planned management.
Moreover
, I am going to spread
this
 incident all around in order to boost your supermarket sales. Next week I am meeting my friend who is a Radio host, and will request him to post
this
 news on air. Once again, thank you for your well-organised staff. Yours faithfully, Mandeep Singh
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task response
Provide a clear and specific response to the given task. The letter should focus on describing the situation, explaining how you were helped, and stating what you are going to do as a result of the good experience.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing could be more formal. Use appropriate salutations and closings in the letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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