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Some people think that universities should provide graduates with the knowledge and skills needed in the workplace. Others think that the true function of a university should be to give access to knowledge for its own sake, regardless of whether the course is useful to an employer. What, in your opinion, should be the main function of a university?

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Some individuals believe that
university
courses
 should be aligned with the
requirement
in
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 the
job
market
,
whereas
 others believe those causes should only provide knowledge regardless of its usefulness in the workplace. I strongly believe that universities should function to provide
graduates
 that have skills in
current
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job
market
. Teaching
courses
 that
useless
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 to the
job
market
 create a few problems. The first issue is unemployment. If someone
get
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a degrees
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degrees
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 pending more than 4 years which is not recognised in the
job
market
, that person becomes jobless.
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that
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I know
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then
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 500 1000
graduates
 in Sri Lanka who
does
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 not have a proper
job
 for the degree. The second problem is the unnecessary cost for
government
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.
Generally
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 governments
designing
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 high education
programs
 that
matches
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to
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the
requirement
in
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different
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the different
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 trending
industry
.
The
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 spend a lot of money in order to facilitate students with these
courses
 full stuff it will be a waste if
University
is provide
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courses
 just to level up knowledge without getting a proper return on that expenses. Considering these reasons universities should pass
or
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graduates
 who have
skills
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the skills
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 needed in the
industry
. The
programs
 should design
of
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 analysing
requirement
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requirements
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 in the industries. By doing that
University
 is can provide
high
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 skilled
graduates
 to
the
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society. Which
generate
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 higher demand in the course
as well as
 in the related
industry
. For an
instance
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 it has become a trend in the present.
Thus
, many
university's
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 provide
it related
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courses
 to facilitate the
industry
requirement
. And their hand, unemployment can be solved by producing
graduates
 who have useful skills.
For example
, if Sri Lankan universities provide updated degrees
instead
 of
old fashioned
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 useless
programs
 employment can be solved easily. For the
mom
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 it can
cutoff
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 all the unnecessary expenses.
To conclude
, providing
University
programs
 that I
useful
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 to the
job
market
 is highly necessary as it brings a lot of benefits
such
 as reducing unemployment, increasing demand in the
job
market
, reduce unwanted expenses in
education
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 sector.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Lifelong learning
  • Holistic development
  • Vocational training
  • Industry-specific competencies
  • Critical thinking
  • Creative problem-solving
  • Academic research
  • Intellectual development
  • Ethics and values
  • Societal contribution
  • Job market demands
  • Practical training
  • Internships
  • Knowledge advancement
  • Global challenges
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