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Some people think that strict punishments for driving offences are the key to reducing the traffic accidents. Others, however, believe that other measures would be more effective in improving road safety. Discus both these views and give your own opinion.

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Introduction
Most
of
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the
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people believe , that
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accident
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 is the punishment for
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driver
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drivers
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time
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 the world which goes
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 technology and the
accident
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 rate will increase
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arguu
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argue
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view
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 and
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discuss
 my own opinion .
Body paragraph 1
First of all the
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 is increasing
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 and if the
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population
is increase
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 the number of
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car
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increse
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increase
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accident
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 on a
road
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 .
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 punishment is not the reason
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accident
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for example
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 there are more space for
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car
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 which are travelling on both side and
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 traffic make solution for the rule .
Body paragraph 2
Moreever
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, the
road
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 is
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 not good the main reason
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car
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accident
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 is
also
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road
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 if we care about
our self
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ourselves
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then
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thre
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there
 is
no thing
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 possible for
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road
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a road
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accident
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accidents
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.the
driver
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drive
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car
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a car
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 fast and most of the reason
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also
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accident
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the accident
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 is
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driver
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the driver
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Conclusion
in my opinion both the people are thinking good that say to punish
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driver
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the driver
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 for
road
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 safety they are more
resposible
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responsible
of
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road
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accident
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 if they drive
slow
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 nothing
woll
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will
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occour
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occur
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massive
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the massive
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car
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.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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