The graph shows the rates of participation in three different activities in a UK sports club between 1983 and 2003.

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The following chart reveals the number of involvement in three variations of hobbies in a UK sports club between the dates 1983 to 2003.
Overall
, the graph shows both an incline and a decline throughout the years. In 1983 the most popular occupation was swimming at 50% of club members and the least was for the gym which was only about 5%. In the following year in 1986 , water sports fell steadily to just above 40% . Both gymnasium and team business were continuing around the same rates .
However
, we can see that 1993 was the most crucial time for athletic activities since it almost doubled to 20% .
On the other hand
, swimming fell dramatically to 30% losing 10% of its customers. Next age, team play started gaining popularity slowly pushing it to 40%. Gradually bathing slowly stabilized in the regions of 20%.
Also
, the gym kept climbing erratically . In the period , of 2003 there were no major changes except for team games which collapsed a little.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuation
  • trend
  • participation rates
  • significant increases/decreases
  • pattern
  • stability
  • growth
  • decline
  • membership
  • comparison
  • socio-economic events
  • historical context
  • period of analysis
  • peak
  • popularity
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