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Some people believe that stdying at university or college is the best road to a succesfull career,while others believe that its better to get a job straight after school.Discuss both views and give your opinion?

#people #university #college #road #succesfull #career #job #school
It is
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trusted
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trust
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 that studying at
institute
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an institute
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 or college is the best way to
success
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succeed
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 in
career
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a career
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,
while
 others think that it is better to find a
job
 right after graduating.In my opinion, being a student at
university
 or school,and finding
a
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apply
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labour are both good options. On the one hand,learning at
academy
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an academy
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 or college plays an important role in everyone's life.Because at that time your base knowledge will be created and you will be ready for fully grown living.
In addition
,
successful
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a successful
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 career begins
from
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with
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 little steps at
university
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a university
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 entity.
For instance
,you chose math science at
institute
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the institute
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 and you have a
go to
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go-to
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 success in your occupation.
Morever
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Moreover
 you will study there for certain years and after graduating you will find a
job
 which regarding your chosen labour.In my opinion learning at
academy
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an academy
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do
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does
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 help you in your successful career.
On the other hand
,finding a
job
 right after graduating is a straightforward way.Because you will not be given
fully
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full
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 knowledge and school experience might not be enough for living.
Firstly
,
wage
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the wage
a wage
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 of chosen
job
 might be less.
Beacuse
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Because
 you have not got any cognitions about that labour.
In
addition
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,addition
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 people who retrieve a
job
 might be grown
in
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up in
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poor
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a poor
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family
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families
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.Because
university
 demands
much
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a lot of
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 money and these citizens think about their
parents
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parent's
parents'
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 financial aspects.Notwithstanding
study
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studying
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 at
academy
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the academy
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,they want to be paid money and take care of family members. In conclusion,it seems to me that both views are satisfactory,but
i
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I
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 prefer studying at
university
 to
find
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finding
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 a
job
.
Submitted by 29th of april on

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