The charts below compare the age structure of the populations of France and India in 1984. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts give data about
age
structure comparisons in India and France. The figures in the study
was
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collected in
year
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1984.
Overall
, more people in France were able to reach the
age
of more than 85
years
old and
majority
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the majority
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of them are women.
Whereas
in India, there
were
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was
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equal
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the equal
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proportion of
male
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males
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and females who got to reach the
age
of 70 and above. In detail,
he
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the
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highest
age
bracket recorded was 30-35
years
old with about 4% in both men and women
while
the lowest is the
age
of more than 85
years
old.
In addition
, 85
years
old and above is the oldest
age
that people in France were able to reach. Through the
years
, it is noted that most of them are females.
While
in India, their
overall
population were only able to make at the
age
of more than 70
years
old. When they are born, it is noted that the proportion of female and male newborns are almost equal in percentages and these portions for each gender continued until they reach the
age
of 70.
Although
, their population was consistently decreasing in the 70
years
time.
However
, when they step the
age
of 70 and above, it significantly
rise
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from roughly a
percent
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per cent
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to approximately 1.5
percent
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per cent
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on
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for
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both genders.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words age, years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.

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