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Public health is becoming an urgent issue nowadays. Some argue that governments should create nutrition and food choice laws to improve public health, while others believe that it is a matter of personal choice and responsibility. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Today the
health
 of people is an important problem to our society and the public is divided between those who think that state needs to create nutrition to increase the strength of the nation and who think that
health
 is
the
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 personal problem of people. I agree with the public that believes
health
 is a personal responsibility. The first reason is that anybody should care for themselves ,especially for their own well-being.
It is clear that
 most humans are born with normal fitness and it
human's
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 responsibility to keep it like that and that's only humans who ruin their own well-being. For ,instance if we will track two men for the time length of thirty years and if one of them will stick healthy style of life but another person will do opposite actions
it is clear that
 after thirty years the first man will be healthy and the second unhealthy. Even though it is right that authority should be involved in the
health
 of its own society
however
 it's not good when
state
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do
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 dirty work for others so it needs to promote a healthy lifestyle. A good example is the Netherlands where almost everybody drives a bicycle so the Dutch authority hits two birds with one stone.
Their
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 public helps ecology and at the same ,time they are helping their own physical condition.
Such
 examples can be found everywhere in the world. In conclusion, I believe that everybody must take care of
its
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 own well-being and the regime
need
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 to assist
to
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their
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its
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 people by developing facilitates that can improve
health
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the health
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 of the nation in future.
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