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A large number of young people are leaving school and cannot find a job. What problems will youth unemployment cause for individuals and for society? What measures should be taken to reduce the level of unemployment among young people Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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In the present day, most
students
 who graduate there cannot get a job.
This
 is a very big trouble in many nations around the world. In my opinion, I think the government must solve the
problem
.
In addition
, joblessness
is very affects
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people
 and society. In
this
 essay, I will discuss out-of-work
such
 as reducing the level of unemployment and
problem
 in
people
 and society. To being with, the main point of unemployment is experienced. Some
students
 have fewer experiences in the job that many companies request and
second,
it is
technology
 because it is very important in the modern world there must have more knowledge of
technology
such
 as google meet, Zoom, Tiktok and Facebook or other types.
Third,
it is
languages
,
languages
 are very good skill for
students
 if there know more than one language
such
 as Korean
languages
, Chinese
languages
 and Spain
languages
, so I strongly believe that
students
 who have good
skills
 in
technology
 and other
languages
 can find jobs easier.
Moreover
, I think
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a
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character is very important for
people
 as
people
 who have
a
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good
characters
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character
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 like keeping a smile and active
people
 will pass the interview more than shy
students
. So, I have two ways to solve the
problem
 of joblessness from my true story,
First,
the government and the college will teach
students
 about
technology
 and language and send them to internships
also
, an internship abroad is very good because
students
 can learn more
languages
 and more
skills
 with the foreigner.
Second,
the most skill for
students
 in the modern world is soft
skills
, the graduate must learn more about soft
skills
 like service minds, caring about each other and understanding each other too.
To sum up
, the situation of out-of-work affected
people
 and the community but we can solve the
problem
 if
students
 will developing themself.
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