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A large number of young people are leaving school and cannot find a job. What problems will youth unemployment cause for individuals and for society? What measures should be taken to reduce the level of unemployment among young people Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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In the present day, most
students
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 who graduate there cannot get a job.
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 is a very big trouble in many nations around the world. In my opinion, I think the government must solve the
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.
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, joblessness
is very affects
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people
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 and society. In
this
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 essay, I will discuss out-of-work
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 as reducing the level of unemployment and
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 in
people
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 and society. To being with, the main point of unemployment is experienced. Some
students
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 have fewer experiences in the job that many companies request and
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it is
technology
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 because it is very important in the modern world there must have more knowledge of
technology
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such
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 as google meet, Zoom, Tiktok and Facebook or other types.
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it is
languages
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,
languages
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 are very good skill for
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 if there know more than one language
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 as Korean
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, Chinese
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 and Spain
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, so I strongly believe that
students
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 who have good
skills
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 in
technology
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 and other
languages
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 can find jobs easier.
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, I think
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character is very important for
people
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 as
people
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 who have
a
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good
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 like keeping a smile and active
people
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 will pass the interview more than shy
students
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. So, I have two ways to solve the
problem
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 of joblessness from my true story,
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the government and the college will teach
students
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 about
technology
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 and language and send them to internships
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, an internship abroad is very good because
students
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 can learn more
languages
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 and more
skills
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 with the foreigner.
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the most skill for
students
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 in the modern world is soft
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, the graduate must learn more about soft
skills
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 like service minds, caring about each other and understanding each other too.
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, the situation of out-of-work affected
people
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 and the community but we can solve the
problem
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 if
students
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 will developing themself.
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