The bar chart below gives the results of a survey in a major company showing the attitudes of two groups of workers to various factors affecting work performance.

The bar chart below gives the results of a survey in a major company showing the attitudes of two groups of workers to various factors affecting work performance.
The chart compares the importance of several factors which influence the work performance of two employee groups aged 18-30 and 45-60.
Overall
, those aged 18-30 value opportunities for personal development, promotion as well a relaxed work environment more than those ages 45-60. The most striking difference is that pre-retirement workers consider chances for personal promotion and learning new skills approximately 50 per cent less important than the other age group.
Moreover
, older workers prefer working in a team of professionals where everyone is respected and
that is
led by a competent boss.
Although
the importance of team spirit gained nearly the same importance rate among the two groups that can be expressed in numbers as 70 per cent, money was considered to be more important by those of younger age. In conclusion, the older the worker the more he/she appreciates working
together with
professionals in a non-toxic atmosphere
while
those aged 18-30 value opportunities for promotion, personal development and higher salaries that are shown as a higher percentage on a chart.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • performance metrics
  • employee satisfaction
  • work-life balance
  • job security
  • recognition and rewards
  • survey results
  • attitude differences
  • workforce demographics
  • management strategies
  • company policies
  • employee engagement
  • professional development
  • compensation packages
  • motivation factors
  • survey respondents
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