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The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing Do you agree or disagree. Give reasons and give examples

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E-commerce is a new emerging trend all over the world.
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the
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businesses have shifted to online selling, a lot of other businesses still sell in
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 traditional manner. In
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 essay, I will present the reasons
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why the increase in digital shopping will lead to
closing
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 down of shops in cities and towns.
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, convenience is a major fact that people look for these days and
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 is what they get through digital
purchase
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. Previously, we used to purchase clothes by visiting multiple malls and markets but now we have multiple E-commerce
stores
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. Everything is now available
on
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 one click.
Stores
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 like Daraz, Ali Express, Pat pat and many
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 are really doing well online. Since
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 and my friends are working mothers we prefer online grocery shopping rather than going to the grocery store as it saves a lot of time and we get the desired items instantly. The other major reason is the wide range of products available online. People prefer a lot of variety which they usually don’t get at
single
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 store. They have to visit multiple
stores
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 for options.
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, online shopping gives us the flexibility to go through multiple
stores
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 with less human interaction.
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, applications like Daraz provide us with
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 of options for a single product and
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 give us the price filter option.
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, in
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stores
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 we don’t have
this
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 liberty and store managers sell the items based on their commitments with the brands and
similar
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 situation is for the shelf spacing as well. I strongly believe that in
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 fast-paced digital world, there is less room for physical interaction and as things are now evolving on daily basis and there is a dire need to stay updated.
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, gradually these
stores
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 will shut down and will become a part of the digital world eventually.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • physical stores
  • online retailers
  • retail apocalypse
  • digital economy
  • consumer behavior
  • sustainability
  • commercial landscape
  • high-street
  • consumer trends
  • augmented reality
  • showrooms
  • carbon footprint
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