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Some people say history is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think of love, in today’s world, subjects like science and technology are more important than history. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #history #school #subjects #love #today’s #world #science #technology
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some
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 that teaching
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 and
science
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 is prior to teaching
history
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 to pupils. In ,contrast others think
history
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 is one of the fundamental objects in the education curriculum in schools.l partially believe that learning about the past is as essential as
technology
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 and
science
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.
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 some believe that learning
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 is useless
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 the student can devote their
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 to learning about
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 or
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, regardless of the pupils who are curious about
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, to improve knowledge of the public about their past and culture
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 providing the chance for youngsters to reveal events or
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's experiences to deal with war or any types of natural disasters in social and individual
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 in centuries ago by the aim of improving kids ability in case they face the same issues or problems their elders had in their future.
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, the rate of mortality out of hunger which could be because of war or drought or other natural disasters in past thought us how to save our provisions in case of disasters.
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, being competent in
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 or
science
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 may be an option for children to achieve brilliant accomplishments in their prospective occupations or even their
life
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, the
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 who are able to deal with software as new
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 probably have better income to make their
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 far better than those who know a lot about
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 in plenty of countries.
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, modernity pursues parents to force their kids to learn about
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 or
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 rather than
history
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 and they considered
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 major as a second priority or even as a topic that should study in their leisure
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, the majority of parents pursue their kids to be a doctor or engineers rather than historians.
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 for many
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 studying
history
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 or increasing a student's knowledge about
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 seems wasting
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while
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 pupils can invest their
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 to improve their competency and skills in
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 and
science
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,l believe learning
history
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 is vital for children to be ready for their individual and social
life
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.
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