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Some people say that it is the responsibility of the citizens to take care of the environment. While others say that it is the government that should take care of the environment. Discuss both the views and state your opinion.

#people #responsibility #citizens #care #environment #government
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Our surroundings to a large extent reflect our personalities. How it's been catered for depends on individuals or the governing authorities. A lot of
people
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 are of the opinion that
people
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 should be responsible for tending to their environs
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 another group opine that it is the duty of the
government
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 to ensure
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 running of the
environment
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.
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 essay will be discussing both views and my thought concerning
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 topic. An important aspect of habitat
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 is its ability to be sustainable. Sustainability can be assured if the inhabitants of
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 a place are involved in the caring process.
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, most
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 are
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 to clean their environs and with
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 type of training, it can be certain that a lot more
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 will participate in taking
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 of their
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.
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, when citizens are involved in nurturing their
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, they can access areas that may be difficult for the
government
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 to reach easily.
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, when the
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 is in charge of looking after a physical area, they
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 able to provide
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a more
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 sophisticated approach in ensuring the surroundings are taken
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 of. In my opinion, I think the
government
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 should have the responsibility to cater for the
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. In summary, the
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 should play the role of taking
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 of the
environment
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 with as much support from the citizens.
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