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The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The provided chart denotes the total durations of phone calls in the UK under three categories(local, national and international, mobiles) between 1995 and 2002.
Overall
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, the duration of mobile and national telephone calls showed an increment throughout the
period
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,
while
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 the time for local calls increased in the middle of the
period
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.
Besides
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, local fixed line calls were reported as the most famous type of call type,
whereas
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 the least favourite call type was mobiles in the given
period
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. Initial analysis of the chart showed that the duration of local calls accounted for roughly 72
billion
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minutes
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 in 1995, and it increased significantly and reached closer to 90
billion
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minutes
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 in 1998. Afterwards, in the next year, the figures almost levelled off
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 from 2000 to 2002 it witnessed a steady decrement and reported around the same value (72
billion
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minutes
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) which was in 1995.
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, the total number of
minutes
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 of national and international calls via fixed line started at just under 40
billion
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 margins
then
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 it inclined steadily to 60
billion
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minutes
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 in 2001 and remained till 2002.
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, mobile calls climbed dramatically throughout the
period
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. In detail, the initial total duration of mobile calls was at approximately 2
billion
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minutes
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 in 1995, but it reached approximately 40
billion
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minutes
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 in 2002.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words period, billion, minutes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • total number of minutes
  • telephone calls
  • categories
  • local – fixed line
  • national and international – fixed line
  • mobiles
  • general trend
  • yearly totals
  • significant changes
  • milestones
  • data
  • rise significantly
  • decline
  • steady increase
  • fluctuate
  • peak
  • exponential growth
  • over the period
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