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The graph below shows the percentage of workers from five different European countries that were absent for a day or more due to illness from 1991 to 2001. Summarise the information by selecting reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the percentage of workers from five different European countries that were absent for a day or more due to illness from 1991 to 2001. Summarise the information by selecting reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the proportion of employees from
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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, France, Sweden,
UK
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the UK
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 and Germany that had one or more day-off owing to sickness over a period of 10 years starting from 1991.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the percentage of
Germany
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German
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laborers
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labourers
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 with illness absence was the lowest, the opposite was true for the figure
of
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for
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the Netherlands’
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Netherlands’
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Netherlands
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 over the period given. In 1991, the percentage of off-workers who suffered from sickness in
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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 and France stood at approximately 5, which was nearly double higher than that in Sweden. In the next 5 years, the rate of Netherlands and France employees with diseases absence experienced a significant drop, with 4.2 for
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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’ and 3.2 for
France’s
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France
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 in the year 1996.
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, over that 5-year period, Sweden’s fluctuated slightly around 3
percents
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per cent
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. Since
then
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, the percentage of
Sweden
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Sweden's
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 and Netherlands’ day-off workers
due to
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 illness substantially climbed,
stabilised
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stabilising
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 at 4.8 and 5.2 respectively,
while
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 the rate of France’s remained unchanged over the next 5-year time. Looking at other features, the rate of off-work
labores
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labourers
 because of diseases in
UK
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the UK
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 and Germany reached approximately 2% in 1991, which
were
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was
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 the smallest
percentages
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percentage
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 among all rates given. Over the time shown, these two proportions saw a minimal fluctuation,
then
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 levelled off at 2.4 and 1.9 respectively in the end.

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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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